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Sonic
02-07-2009, 11:38 PM
My heart is thumping in utter panic, I cannot see a thing. I am holding something in my right hand but for the life of me cannot figure out what it is yet? Darkness surrounds me. Perhaps my eyes have been permanently blinded without my realisation. Have I really been blinded throughout my life or am I just dreaming?

I feel the object in my hand and press a button, I hear a static then soon afterwards, a voice.

“Hello Nathan...”

How the fuck does this person know my name?

“...You may not know me but I know you, I want to play a little game...”

Without moving my eyes, I tried to stand up in complete darkness. I had a funny feeling that whoever stole me from my apartment last night, he or she stitched up both of my eyes completely shut. When attempting to stand up, I find myself falling back down onto the cold damp concrete floor...I kept thinking to myself 'shit'.

“...All your life, you have been an eye witness to many crimes that you may have not committed. Without telling anyone, you allow yourself to move away from the crime and completely forget about it...”

Stunned from what I just heard, I froze and continued to listen to the tape in it's entirely.

“...now I am giving you a second chance. Your eyes are blinded by doings so you will have to find the keys on your own to escape...”

'Keys...what keys?' I kept thinking.

"...find the keys and you will be free."

The tape stopped. I threw the tape recorder as far as I could and allowed my arms to hover above the ground, feeling for this key mentioned in the cassette. I stopped and felt something. A boot maybe? I feel someone's breath blowing in my ear.

“Live or die Nate, the choice is yours!”

I hear a sharp electronic beep behind me and a noise of gears rapidly clicking together in a matter of seconds. It dawned on me that my life is utterly fucked. In an instant, death and the devil is now my new soul mate.

[Opening Song – Disturbia - Rihanna]

The screams of a helpless young man can be heard throughout the building but no one can hear it. No one ever will.


~Bum bum be-dum bum bum be-dum bum~
What's wrong with me?

(Faith Writing Productions presents...)
~Bum bum be-dum bum bum be-dum bum~
Why do I feel like this?

~Bum bum be-dum bum bum be-dum bum~
I'm going crazy now

(Chad Michael Murray as Detective Richard Jones)
~Bum bum be-dum bum bum be-dum bum~

(Russell Brand as Scott Harris)
No more gas in the rig, can't even get it started
Nothing heard, nothing said, can't even speak about it.

(Rob Vitacca as Michel van Helsing)
All my life on my head. Don't want to think about it.
Feels like I'm going insane...yeah

(Ashley Greene as Peggy Cullen)
It's a thief in the night to come and grab you.
It can creep up inside you and consume you.
A disease of the mind it can control you.
It's too close for comfort.

(...and James Franco as Jayse Uzumaki)
Throw on your break lights, we're in the city of wonder. Ain't gonna play nice.
Watch out, you might just go under better think twice
Your train of thought will be altered so if you must faulter be wise.

Your mind is in Disturbia. It's like the darkness is the light.
Disturbia. Am I scaring you tonight?
Your mind is in Disturbia. Ain't used to what you like?
Disturbia...
Disturbia...

~Bum bum be-dum bum bum be-dum bum~
(continue till fade)


~#Broken Strings#~

~#Written by Richard Evans (Magus)#~
~#Co-written by Michel Peter Dijkhuizen (Angel Of Sins)#~

Moriamur
02-07-2009, 11:47 PM
Hmmm... Interesting way on how you start your SAW: Disturbia fic with the whole mystery going on with an unknown killer (Jigsaw?) and an unknown dead trap I believe...

This is a pretty interesting way of setting up this story, shrouded in mystery. You keep this up man, and I'll be reading it

Fallout
02-08-2009, 12:40 AM
Zmog creepy! But so exciting :D Can't wait to see more!

Kaiser Zero
02-08-2009, 12:55 AM
Awesome Rich! Great way to start it off and very Saw-ish!

John Marston
02-08-2009, 12:57 AM
I like it. Very spooky indeed.

Dee Ariss
02-08-2009, 02:46 AM
Glamtastic bit of work there, Faith, love the opening, very suspenseful. Can't wait to read more.

Sonic
02-08-2009, 11:20 PM
Thank you to everyone who has commented on my Fan Fiction so far ^_^

I must credit my co-writer Michel Peter Dijkhuizen (Angel Of Sins) and thank him for contributing to my input with this story so far. With that in mind, I have asked him to help me write this episode and hopefully many others...hehehe ^_^ XD

I must state now that most of this series (apart from the traps) will be written by me.

Moriamur
02-08-2009, 11:22 PM
heh *scratches back of head*

what can I say? I have a truly sick and twisted mind, and if you don't believe me, then ask Dee Ariss who can confirm it

Either way, Richard. I am looking forward to the first episode of SAW: Disturbia

LET'S BRING ON THE HORROR AND GORE!!!